Develop Writing Through Planning and Revising Practice Test

Writing task: Informational essay. Purpose: explain how to stay safe online. Audience: other middle school students. Stage: editing for conventions.

Draft excerpt:

“Students should protect there passwords, and dont share them with freinds. If someone ask you for it you should say no.”

Which edit best demonstrates command of standard English conventions while keeping the meaning the same?

Writing task: Write an informational article explaining how earthquakes happen. Purpose: inform. Audience: 5th graders at your school. Stage: revising for audience.

Draft excerpt:

“Earthquakes occur when accumulated tectonic stress exceeds frictional resistance along a fault plane, causing a sudden release of elastic strain energy.”

Teacher feedback: “This is accurate, but the vocabulary is too complex for 5th graders. Make it easier to understand without losing the main idea.”

Which revision best fits the audience while keeping the purpose of informing?