Produce Clear and Coherent Writing Practice Test

Writing task: Write an informative/explanatory response for your science class to explain the water cycle.

Student draft:

"Water goes up, then it goes down. It happens because of science. Clouds do cloud things and then rain happens. After that, the water returns to places and the cycle repeats, which is why it is called a cycle."

Which revision would most improve the draft’s clarity and precision while staying informative?

Writing task: Write an argument essay to persuade your principal to allow students to use phones during lunch (with reasonable rules).

Student draft (body paragraphs only):

"First, phones are fun. Second, phones can be educational. Another thing is that teachers already take phones sometimes. Also, some kids need to text their parents. My cousin’s school allows phones and it’s fine. Phones are just part of life."

Which revision plan would best improve the draft’s development and organization for this argument?